peer review

The over all fell I get from your paper is that I would have liked to hear more of what you think.It would be interesting if after a persons quoteyou put your imput on what they are saying.I would also not have as many quotes but more of what you think.The parts that are you talking are much more intresting than the quotes. I really like your first paragragh.I think you should touch on those questions in your paper.On page 3 2nd to last para. I would'nt put many,many.On page 4 the sentence however , I am gladto know that will always be my chioce.I like this sentence.I would combine the last paragragh on page 4 with the paragragh before.A make a new closing. I would give you advise for that but I suck at closings.